Final Cut - with out Ident

What is on this cut:

• All the scenes shot
• Titles
• The soundtrack 

What isn't on this cut:

• My ident and Naimhs ident

Audience Feedback:

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Feedback for improvements

1) Although you have attempted to keep up with the media terminology in your blog, there’s room for improvement. There needs to be more use of it throughout your blog and when you are describing your own film, think about denotation and connotation and signifiers and add these terms to your descriptions (in pink. Or some other colour!)

2) Your analysis of Donnie Darko and Heathers are very good but you also need to blog on the conventions and history of your chosen genre.

3) Your production schedule (call sheet) needs adding with dates and times. There generally needs to be more evidence of planning. You could also add any communication between you, Niamh and your actors to show evidence of planning.

4) Your rough cuts need to be more in number and with more detailed explanations – what works, what doesn’t work, what needs to be improved etc.

5) Finally, you need to gain some audience feedback on your most recent cut. Ask friends from your target audience to watch the film and collect feedback from them either using video or a questionnaire etc.

Feedback - audience

I have had multiple people watching my opening, some people from our target audince and some family members.

Target audience - teenagers // media students
   Rough cut Three

• The music fits well with the timing of the shots.
• I lilke the title of neighbours, where it is placed with the background looks good, it looks like it is under lining it bringing your attention to it.
• The continuity of the shots are well edited.
• Edit the music to have more of a rythmn, gradually building up because at the moment it is quite similar throughout.
• Slow down the beggining shots of Sarah and Isabelle so we can get a good idea of what they look like and who they are.
• The scenes from their bedroom to the school jump quite a bit - there is no connetion. (Because we hadn't shot the scene inbwtween just yet, we have now addded this scene - 12th of Feb).

Target audince - teenagers // friends
   Rough cut Three

• It's good I like it.
• I'd proabably watch it if I new more about it.
• It all flows really well together.
• The music brings it all together really well.
• I like the ending, it sums everything up and leaves you wiyh a sense of mystery.
• The editing of sarah following the girls in the graveyard works really well (the overlapping of the shots - girls walking away from sarah).
• Maybe inprove on the colour scheme - some of the scenes were different colours to the others.

Rough cut five

Feedback:

• the music works - however it sounds like it is on a loop
• where is the changing point (volta) in the music
• the titles don't fit the genre

What is in this cut:

• titles
• title of "Neighbours"
• non-diegetic music created on garageband
• all the scenes 

What isn't in this cut:

• Final titles 
• scene three
• ending

Rough cut four

This was my initial idea for titles.

• Feedback was that it didn't really fit the genre of the film.
• The genre being black comedy the sans-serif text didn't really make an effect on the genre of the film.
• The text was too friendly and comical.
• The placement of the titles are good - using the shots effectivly.

Feedback and Targets

Targets: What still needs to be done 01/02

Deadline - 12/01

• Still need to film the section of the letter being read aloud for an over voice.
• Still need to film Sarah and Izzy leaving their house showing the audience where they live - giving the reason behind the name 'Neighbours'.
• Need to continue creating music for the introduction.

Feedback for exam section 2:

EAA: 11/20

Ex: 9/20

T: 4/10

Total: 24/50

Decent attempt but there are some major problems too. In order to get higher marks, i need to make sure that the examples you use are specific to the points i am making rather than general guesswork. So if i want tot talk about social media, i need to write about how this technology was used in a specific case to market a film. If i don't do this, my marks will be severely limited. I had the whole internet to call upon, so it should have been fairly straightforward to find an example. Also, i need to talk more about piracy too, as this is a form of digital consumption that has a big impact not he industry.

Rough cut - three

• I have now added some testing titles. 
• Not too sure where to put them in comparison to the rest of the opening.
• We still need to shoot one more scene. Should be done by the end of the week.
• Reading of letter - over voice
• walking out of houses - showing they are neighbours.

Feedback:

• The testing titles don't fit the genre of the film 
• too many transitions 
• The title "Neighbours" doesn't work by being on is own. Needs to use the backgrounds - not what you would usually see on this genre of film.

What is in this cut:

• testing titles 
• transition of titles
• "Neighbours" title 
• All the scenes apart from scene three

What isn't in this cut:

• scene three - walking out of houses showing the antagonists are neighbours 
• not sure on the definite titles
• Non-diegetic music created on garageband by Rian

Pitch - initial film idea

Overview:
The feedback that i got from the audience was overall positive. For example they liked the idea of the film being a black comedy and most people think that it the my idea behind the colour costume, separating the different cliques was simple yet effective. Howvever there were some worries when I mentioned the idea of filming in the school corridors, due to other people being around and they may not fit in the scene. I will overcome this by filming after school and then there will be minimal people in the corridor, so we don't need to get all of those peoples connect to be in my film. 
  there were also concerns when it came to the funeral section. However i think that it would actually be more effective if there was simply 3/4 people surrounding the grave. This keeps the eyes on the grave and makes it more suspicious of why these girls are standing over this particular grave. Leaving narrative enigma for the audience with in the first few minutes. Wich will help me create the sense of wanting to watch more for the audience. Brining them in.